When I leave, I would like the day to be as soft as a bank of ferns. I would like the clouds to throw their arms wide open in a burst of silver and sunlight. Oh, when I leave, let it be a beautiful day!
soft greenery /
bowing to wooden ties /
as the train passes //
No film noir departure for me! No tearful letters dissolving in the rain! Let the rain bring its puddles with their many-colored reflections. There will be shimmering leaves, sunbursts, brightly colored umbrellas, faint flickers of bird flight. When I leave, the puddles will vibrate like portals opening into the aether!
irresistible /
dropping pebbles in puddles /
rippling my daydreams //
“Why is she looking down?” people will ask. “Not looking down at all,” I’ll reply. I’ll be exploring those puddles, making a world quiver with a gentle toe prod.
Perhaps it won’t be my toe that makes the world quiver. Perhaps it will be the thunderous rumbling of a train in a station. The air will be heavy with the smell of diesel and hot machinery! Inside and outside, my ribs will be thumping! My eardrums will pound!
Oh, when I leave, it will be a beautiful day!
my train comes roaring /
on rollicking waves of sound – /
leaving at last //
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This post is written for Ligo Haibun Photo Prompt 8, where our task was to write about one of two photos. I chose the train station. Hopefully you will forgive me for introducing The Beatles into a haibun! But … we saw a wonderful Beatles tribute band called “Rain” the other evening – and their tribute to the Sergeant Pepper era was amazing.
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Image: Ligo Railroad for Ligo Haibun
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Took a long time for this one to make it to my Reader. Worth the wait! As I said in an email, the prose blows me away, the haiku integrate nicely…and I really don’t care for the Beatles’ song “Lucy…” :P I guess you can’t please all the people all the time! :)
Hmmm… wonder why the reader is so delayed today? Darn WP hiccups!
So glad you liked the prose — I struggled with it for a bit — didn’t really get the FEEL of it till the very end. So — thank you very much! :)
lovely writing. bon voyage for when you leave …
Thank you very much Belinda :)
This is one of your more brilliant haibun I think Jen, I just read you struggled with it … think you won in the end.
Thanks Georgia!
The words and feeling were swirling around the outside of my vision — and wouldn’t *quite* come in for a landing!
This means a lot :)
You’re on a roll with your haiku and haibun … I think your muse is making yo struggle to raise you to excellence!
Thanks Georgia!
Though … some days … I wish the muse would give me a few hints — and a bit sooner!
lol … they are bitches my dear and temperamental ones at thet.
Ain’t that the truth! :'(
alas … sigh.
Such a wonderful departure! Love the idea of kicking a puddle to agitate the world within.
So glad you liked it!
Gotta keep the portal people on their toes…! ;)
Love it!
So glad! I thought of you at the concert!
I have never seen them! Not yet, anyways… but I am seeing Ringo Saturday here in Cleveburg. :)
So jealous!!!
Huh. I read “when I leave” as “when I die”. I wonder if anyone else reads it that way. Or, is it just me?
There are many kinds of voyages. :)
No worries though; not planning on checking out any time soon.
I always enjoy your Haibuns, Jen. You do them so well. Such a perfect mix of prose and poetry!
Thank you so much Kirsten :)
What a lovely haibun – so full of sweet longing and love of life. I’m tempted to say – please don’t leave – keep writing instead :)
Thanks Suzanne! I’m so glad you liked it.
No worries — no plans on leaving just yet. :)
Jolly good :)
:)