pale roots /
rising from the forest floor – /
the pine bares her shoulders /

released by my hand /
a scent of leather and moss – /
crumbling oak bark //

Written for Carpe Diem Haiku Kai, where “Forest” from “Sand and Foam” was our prompt:

[…] “We were fluttering, wandering, longing creatures a thousand thousand years before the sea and the wind in the forest gave us words. Now how can we express the ancient of days in us with only the sounds of our yesterdays?” […]

Here is our host’s *amazing* response:

listen to the wind
that moves through the forests –
buzzing mosquitos

© Chèvrefeuille

Hope you don’t mind the lack of photos – this time I felt they’d be distracting.  


30 thoughts on “Pale Roots / Released by My Hand (Haiku)

  1. I particularly like the second poem, in which our author gets down and dirty on the forest floor… ahem – I think combining the two separate senses in the last two lines is very powerful. “Crumbling” just takes the reader right there.


  2. Lovely haiku… depending on the season the pine could be disrobing her old needles… getting ready to once again hold the sky in place.

    (giggled along with give Peace a chance. Some men think drinking warm beer tastes like… well anyway.)

    I like the second one because I can imagine myself doing just that…
    (playing catch-up again…I’ll get to your other visits eventually.)


  3. Love these haiku … sometimes I think the ku might be better without the distraction of photos … these were really very interesting … but the first one threw me .. can’t figure out the “the pine bears her shoulders … Lovely scent-ku too!


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