all by myself
in the smoking milkweed –
lonely red bug
Please see my ending notes ….
One thing we use too little in haiku is the dry humor you can sometimes find in classical haiku. Maybe we are too respectful to the form sometimes, still when reading through I see (often with apologies) attempts in this direction. Today I would like you to take an approach to the dry wit of haiku writing.
We have had even classic example previously here, consider for example this one by Issa:
spring peace –
a mountain monk peeks
through the hedge
The combination of the monk and peeking through the hedge removes some of the respect for the monk and makes him a human of flesh and blood, and spring is an excellent time when this might happen to a monk full of hormones.
Another way of doing humor in haiku is a concept of renku haikai no renga (“comic linked verse”). This is similar to renga in the sense that we create a comic effect in collaborative poetry.
A classic example is:
The robe of haze is wet at its hem
to which the disrespectful response was:
Princess Sao of spring pissed as she started
Imagine, a deity like the princess of spring gets wet by peeing on herself.
So what’s the big deal with the lonely red beetle?