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Waterbaby.  Departing Geese.

Waterbaby. Departing Geese.

ephemeral  –
these tiny waterfalls
born on takeoff
.
unpainting themselves
the wild geese depart

Linked to Carpe Diem Tanka Shrine #2: Departing Geese.  This is the newest member of the Carpe Diem family!   Our task was to write a tanka inspired by the photo and this inspirational tanka from our host Chèvrefeuille:

departing geese
King Winter is on his way
snow and frost will come
cherry blossoms bloom again
the sound of geese returning back

© Chèvrefeuille

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There is also a wonderful song by Nick Cave – which comes to mind when seeing this photo.
But, I’ve used it recently.     A beautiful song though. 

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21 thoughts on “ephemeral (tanka)

  1. As I’m passing through this way again, I paused for another read of the tanka… and this is really beautiful. Surely included in the book?

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    • Thanks Blake 😀

      Yes, ephemeral is in the “critters and creatures” section — so — if I choose to go in that direction, this is a candidate.
      And its partner (linked via Nick Cave!) is in the “humanity” section. Surely that’s the achiest, longing-est song ever. [Sigh.]

      I shall sigh again. [Sigh….!]
      Better now 😉

      You’re so kind – so glad you liked it 🙂

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  2. I was looking for the “soap opera” tanka you mentioned, but wasn’t sure which it would be – I knew this post wasn’t the one I was after but I was so intrigued by the words in the preview I took a detour…

    I really love the last two lines, especially “unpainting themselves” – what a great image! Each time I read it I can almost, but not quite, get it to “make sense”, which seems perfectly haiku to me 🙂

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    • Oh, thanks Janice 🙂

      I was struggling to find that haiku moment for the first part, and then for the second part I was struggling to find that “scene/ time shift” that Jane R had talked about. It’s an absolutely stunning image — and I was struck by that gorgeous, soft pink — but couldn’t get it to work, you know? And how do you make “water dropping from a goose’s foot” sound poetic and pretty? LOL So the encouragement means a lot. 🙂

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