Another view. This bothered me.
If you go to the bottom of the hill – and turn around – there’s a nice little riparian area. And it has a well-maintained path and it has park benches – and the various types of trees have informational plaques.
Linked to Carpe Diem Writing Techniques #12. Please read the entire post – our host Chèvrefeuille put so much work into his overview of techniques. I’m adding a condensed version here – to help process all of the information.
Our task was to write a haiku using any of the following techniques – and to indicate our choice of technique. Would you call this “baransu” or “juxtaposition”?
Including two images / ideas that are opposites – yet “have a resonance with each other that will evolve a revelation” (Robert Spiess).
Using the sound of words or of vowels / consonants to evoke a feeling or describe an event or an item.
Using words / sounds several times for emphasis or to increase intensity.
*4* Surprise / Impression:
Catching a moment or a feeling.
In the words of Betty Drevniok, “the SOMETHING and the SOMETHING ELSE are set down together in clearly stated images. Together they complete and fulfill each other as ONE PARTICULAR EVENT.” She rather leaves the reader to understand that the idea of comparison is showing how two different things are similar or share similar aspects.”
“Wabi” is simplicity and humility; “sabi” is a sense of aging with dignity, grace, and beauty.
“Lightness”, spontaneity, childlike wonder, and unhindered expression. As much a “lifestyle” and/or frame of mind as a technique.
Modeled by Santoka Taneda, “free-style” haiku don’t necessarily use 5/7/5 syllables, kigo, kireji, etc., but they do maintain the spirit of haiku.
Balance by association – coined by our host Chèvrefeuille.
over the unmarked grave
an ash tree
and its name