linger with me haiga

Linked to Carpe Diem #733: For a While:

shi baraku wa taki ni komoru ya ge no haijime

for a while
secluded behind the waterfall
summer retreat begins

(Tr. Jane Reichhold)

Chevrefeuille explains that this haiku was written on May 20th, 1688.  It is also contained within Oku no Hosomichi (Narrow Road to the Deep North) – written in 1689.  

The falls are Urami (no take) Falls, four miles west of Nikko.  They were accessible from behind until the earthquake and flood of 1905.   His “seclusion” refers to the “ninety-day period of ascetic seclusion prescribed for Buddhist monks each summer”.

Here is our host’s response:

the sound of water
soothing – like meditating
behind the waterfall

(c) Chèvrefeuille  

And here, again, is my own (for mobile viewers):

linger with me
at water’s edge
for a moment
the canopy is soft
and no swords are dangling

Because the reflections in the Conococheague are very green right now, here is some CCR. There’s a bullfrog here – so it’s haiku-appropriate, right?


25 thoughts on “linger with me (haiga / tanka)

  1. This reads like the start of a medieval song – I can practically hear the lute! And I like how you’ve given the image a kind of metallic/gem-like quality 🙂


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