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Linked to Carpe Diem #742: Under the Trees, where our goal was to write a “karumi-style” haiku using no verbs:

“It was Basho’s belief that a haiku without a verb is “lighter” (karumi means lightness). It is true that the verb often carries with it great emotion. Without it, the poem is more matter of fact and detached. This poem for today is an example of Basho’s idea karumi and it uses the associative technique. Both the blossoms and the soup and pickles are under the trees.”

Here are two examples:

under the trees
soup and pickles
cherry blossoms

glass noodles
few slices of fish
plum blossoms

Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)

CherryBlossoms Graphics Fairy.

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24 thoughts on “in the green

    • Hi there 🙂
      It’s not forbidden, but with syllable count so limited I limit my use of articles. Unless — sometimes it sounds silly without the articles. So — there’s no hard and fast rule — you have to go with the feel of the haiku. 🙂

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  1. “Without [the verb], the poem is more matter of fact and detached.”
    File under “things I realised subconsciously but would never have thought to articulate, and wish I had.” 🙂

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  2. Wow … very very Japanese … remember the woman who commented on western haiku … that we are too explicit and are incapable of being subtle .. I’d like for her to read this haiku and invite her to a crow dinner.

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